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Post by proclaim on May 28, 2012 20:54:05 GMT -6
So um... I'm just here to help anybody seeking help really. I'll try my best to teach you as well as possible&be cooperative as long as you're willing to try you're best to be a good student&be cooperative. If you're not willing to listen, don't bother asking for my help.
Since I don't really know how this is supposed to work, I suppose anyone wishing for my help can post an example post with their character in this class board&point out what you're looking to improve on. I'll reply with some pointers&if it comes down to it, we could do a mini thread as a follow-up to make sure you have the concept down. Remember, students may always return for more help. :3
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Post by Penguin on Jun 20, 2012 13:41:20 GMT -6
Struggling with muse at the moment, but I will work on a example post as soon as words start flowing in my odd mind :3
Basically, I really want to improve on description and character development. When I post, I've noticed I tend to comment a lot of what the person before has done. So if Equine X had walked slowly, then in my reply I would mention that 'Equine X ambled forwards slowly, she observed' and things like that. It's annoying me as it practically acts as a filter and by the time I've done 400+ words my muse is starting to die off, and my character has done very little. This can potentially make me very difficult to RP with as other people don't have much to go on. I think being more descriptive off what my character is feeling, and bringing out more of their personality, will help me improve as an RPer but also give me the inspiration and the motivation to expand my character personas - they're nearly always mares with a gentle disposition. The only exception to this is Nimueh, my only character on here so far, but even she is quite a softie at heart.
If you can help me in any way, I'll love you forever <3
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Post by love on Jun 20, 2012 13:48:02 GMT -6
I'd like to improve on character length and character description. I tend to add in the words that the horse before me has said and i'd like to improve. I used to be able to do 1000 words but now i can only 500 words and i'd like to improve it. My muse is acting up so i can post an example post as soon as my muse is better.
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Post by proclaim on Jun 20, 2012 16:29:18 GMT -6
Well it seems we're all struggling with muse :,D haha, but I'mma talk to y'all both at the same time since y'all seem to have the same problem.
x. character development! What I've found most helpful is basing your characters off something or like or something familiar. Like a favorite character or even yourself. Take Jaeser for example. She's soft spoken like me, a real southern doll. But she over analyzes everything&is rather literal. She has to her you say it rather than just not satin anything at all, if that makes sense. Then look at my boy, Val. Even though he's still kinda a wip, he's based off Erik from Phantom of the Opera. He's easily infatuated with things of beauty, yet he stays back most of the time for he's afraid his blemished face will drive all that is beautiful away.
So once you pick something to maybe base your character off of, get a general personality in your head. Evil or good? Passionate or cold? Think of some quirks, like are they daily infatuated with beautiful things? Or are they over-analytical of everything? Then begin developing a history. Explain how those quirks came to be. Maybe you'll happen to write something in that history to reveal more about how your character thinks&feels.
x. post length! Usually once you've really fleshed your character out, try adding in their feelings&thoughts, as well as description. Try finding synonyms to describe their coat&eye color. Also, remember the five senses. Of you're hitting a rough spot, try adding in another sense!
example: "Jaeser walked forward bla bla bla..."
"Hidden within the emerald recesses of the pines, the large Picasso male watched as a fae with the purest of golden pelt came forward. Astounded he was by the way the sun's bright fingers shimmered along her back as she halted, perching herself upon the rocky shore of the lake.
With a gentle turn of the eyes, Val took in his own color. The deep brown splash he possessed with the tinge of cherry compared nothing to the femme's own hide, yet as his ashen locks fell forward to sheath his facial scar, he debated whether or not to disturb such a created from her day of leisure. Something so beautiful in such a state of peace..., would he really be selfish enough to break it all up in hopes for a personal gain?"
As you can see, I added in his color... I gave two paragraphs just on what he saw&thought. So if you add in all the senses... You should get some length.
Hope this helps! Also, please excuse any mistakes... I didn't proofread this. :,D
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Post by Penguin on Jun 21, 2012 10:43:39 GMT -6
That definitely helps, thanks Proclaim x) My characters tend to be like my self in quite a few aspects and it's when I try to make them different and don't have anything to base them off of that I start struggling to keep them that way. Quite often they turn out too nice or something. Description... it's like I forget to use it after a while. If the thread has been going on for a few posts then I tend to run out of description to add because I'm usually conscious of already having mentioned the weather or scenery many times. It's almost like I end up relying on the other person for any changes in the sky or surrounding, a rather bad habit I'm hoping to break D: But yeah, the paragraphs with Jaeser are certainly inspirational and something to refer to if I'm struggling to come up with ways to include more description and character development in my posts :3
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